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Resume/Linkedin/Elevator Pitch Help

Veteran

jared townsel Antelope, CA

I am a 10 year Army intelligence veteran that just returned from China. I have an MA in China studies and an MA in international affairs. I have been trying to find a position as a business analyst for nearly a month now to no avail. I was wondering if anyone would be willing to take a look at my resume, Linkedin profile or hear my elevator pitch. Any help would be greatly appreciated!

20 July 2013 11 replies Resumes & Cover Letters

Answers

Veteran

jared townsel Antelope, CA

Hello Everyone,

Thank you for your help and suggestions along the way. Today I received an offer for employment that I am going to take. I think a mixture of all of the advice I received and encouraging words got me to the place I needed to be.

Also, I was able to get this opportunity through the Syracuse University Veteran's Technology Program so please spread the word to others that may be interested. http://vets.syr.edu

Thanks again to everyone and all the best!
Jared Townsel

2 August 2013 Helpful answer

Advisor

Chad Grills Potomac, MD

Jared,

Are you set on being a business analyst? If you're open:

Almost any tech company that sells in China would hire you immediately. Any company that services government accounts would be looking to hire you: Booz Allen, etc. They will find/create a place for you with that experience.

-Chad

22 July 2013 Helpful answer

Advisor

Jerry Millar Seattle, WA

Congrats Jared and best of luck in your new career!

Advisor

Kim Gamero Boise, ID

Jared, URS Corporation is in 50 countries, does work with DoD, DoE and may have something you're interested in - www.urscorp.com/careers.

Advisor

Chad Grills Potomac, MD

Jared,

Just sent you a message in response to yours. Sounds good, and Tom and Carolyn have some good advice as well.

Lockheed would definitely be a great place to apply.

-Chad

Advisor

Carolyn Alt Littleton, CO

Jared...are you willing to relocate? If you have not done so...submit your resume to Lockheed Martin. If you held any clearances/accesses...include them on your resume if you have included already. I apologize - I can not view your resume on Linked In...current accesses and social media - tough mix! :)
Looking forward to your posted elevator speech!

http://www.lockheedmartinjobs.com/job-search.aspx

Advisor

Tom Cal, CFA San Francisco, CA

Jared - Keep doing the "right things", and I think something good will happen. -Tom

Veteran

jared townsel Antelope, CA

Hi Tom,
I received from feedback on my elevator speech and am revising it right now but I will post on here soon. Also, thanks for the resume link.

Hello Chad,
I suppose I am dead set on being a business analyst and that has been some of my feedback that I need to focus a bit more. As for China I had been there for the last year and spent nearly 3 months trying to find a position with tech companies without any response. I am now back in the US because my visa there expired. I am also applied to a few positions at Booz Allen but have yet to hear back.

Thank you both for your comments and advice, I will update this post soon.

All the best,
Jared

Advisor

Tom Cal, CFA San Francisco, CA

Jared - also see my and other advice here re: JoblessWarrior.org:
https://acp-advisornet.org/question/885/is-my-resume-doing-me-any-goods

Advisor
Advisor

Tom Cal, CFA San Francisco, CA

Jared - Can you provide the elevator speech in "written" form here?

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