Nancy Leonard ⋅ Manasquan, NJ Technology Companies/Software, IT,Mobile ⋅ 20 years experience

Hi Rory, please connect with me on LinkedIn at http://www.linkedin.com/in/nancyleonard.
I am a LinkedIn expert and I will also be happy to review your linkedin profile, and spend time showing you how to search and apply for positions through LinkedIn. I'll also share with you several tricks about LinkedIn that are not obvious.

Nancy

Rory McEntee ⋅ Olympia, WA U.S. Army, Specialist ⋅ 5 years served

Thank you very much Jamie. I really appreciate the much needed advice!

Jamie Doud ⋅ Houston, TX JRD Consulting; (Prior): Easton Sports ⋅ 20 years experience

Hi Rory, thanks for your service to our country, my father was in the USAF. I've been involved with HR for 20+ years.

I found you on LinkedIn (LI) and I have your profile printed out in front of me.

Top Section: looks good (name, etc.)

Summary Section: This is sometimes the only section people will read to get a feel for your experience, abilities, goals, etc. You've placed you personal email account right at the beginning of this section. Are you looking for people to email you? if so this is OK but put your address someplace else that fits better (maybe at the end of the summary section), if that is not your goal, be careful with having that out there for anyone to use (you know better than I do that people can hack your email account and use it for various things you may not like).

I also suggest that you put in a couple concise paragraphs, starting with an overview of who/what you are, your goals, and then discuss your most current employment, then onsolidate the army info into one paragraph (follow David Taft's suggestion from above).

Experience Section: Suggest you consolidate the US Army experience under "one" employer, and provide a short seperate paragraph for each specific role.

Certifications, education, awards, etc. Suggest you drag and drop your education AA, BS, etc. right after the experience section (after seasonal farm hand). Then certifications, then honors and awards. When you place these items the way you have, it may look like you don't have any college, because people don't always review the entire profile all the way to the end.

All else looks good.

Good luck with all your endeavors.

Rory McEntee ⋅ Olympia, WA U.S. Army, Specialist ⋅ 5 years served

Thank you, John and David!

David Taft ⋅ Dallas, TX Healthcare industry ⋅ 13 years experience

Rory, that looks good. The only suggestions I can give would be to consider adding more specific information on the programs/platforms you are currently working with and potentially "softening" some of the language for your Army experience. As a former infantryman, I get that it is tough to translate that into civilian lingo, but I think it makes a non-vet interviewer more comfortable the more you can make it relatable. Good luck!

John Donaho ⋅ Missouri City, TX JCD Consulting ⋅ 40 years experience

Hi Rory. I'm going to send you an invite to join my Linked-In. Then we can see if your profile needs any tweaking. John