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Let me know what you think about the "About me" section of my profile, and its application to listing such on a resume of a coach?

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Dennis Waters Gaithersburg, MD

I am in the process of writing my PhD dissertation for my program of industrial/organizational psychology. I have had a great many educational and life experiences. These will all contribute to my career path going forward as an executive life and leadership development coach and consultant. What I would like to know from the individuals in this group is what do the things I have listed communicate regarding my leadership experience, since from the military experience, I held the rank of a Sp 4. While at this point I have the Doctorate of Ministry, have completed all required coursework for the PhD and have served as a minister for over 40 years, what does that communicate to an individual about my ability to speak to you as a person whom you would listen to regarding your life and career. This is also in light of the fact that psychometric tests and surveys could be used to bolster what was being said. So I would appreciate your comments on how to highlight my qualifications.

Thanks Dennis L. Waters, Sr.

8 June 2019 2 replies Career Exploration

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Jim Schreier Milwaukee, WI

Powerful profile -- outstanding service and thoughts. I believe -- but others might have a different response -- that what you've written is appropriate for a profile like this on ACP and maybe even on LinkedIn -- but not what I would recommend or believe is best for a resume.

Some thoughts plus you can, if you want, look at some of the many resources I've provided at 212-careers.com plus a few articles I've posted to this site.

You need -- for a resume -- to focus on accomplishment. The best (bad) example you have is you wrote a proposal -- that's the how you did something -- you've buried the result after two sentences. Your resume should start with "Established two new churches based on award of $...., Same thing for everything else.

Plus your lacking, in a couple places, the specificity to help someone really understand something. Example: "watched the towers fall" -- So did a lot of people, so did I -- on a TV in Chicago. If you were there -- that should be clearer and explained. Actually that is something I wouldn't put on a resume at all.

"Founded the Center" -- with what results other than the activities (led seminars, etc.) -- how many people served or attended, what was your budget, how did you raise. What about the dates on this? If it's still operational I'd want to to know -- if closed, ????

I would strongly recommend checking some of the things I've posted - on specificity, focusing on accomplishments, not activities, avoiding "Superman" type claims with too many skills, awards, etc.

8 June 2019 Helpful answer

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Dennis Waters Gaithersburg, MD

Jim,

Thanks for this detailed answer. I will definitely review the material at your website as well as look for some of your articles on this site. I already have a few modifications in mind, both inclusions and deletions.

Grateful for the review,
Dennis L. Waters, Sr.

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