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Requesting resume review and feedback

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Joseph McGovern Colorado Springs, CO

All,
I need guidance, mentoring, and help. I am trying to build a stronger resume because I am trying to progress my career and preparing for a move. My wife and I are working on moving to Houston in the next year. My resume is lacking something because I am not getting any follow-ups on job applications. My applications have been both internal to my company and external. I would love to stay with my current company but if there are not any opportunities available, I want to stay within the defense industry.
I served 20 years in the Air Force and I spent most of time in Military Personnel (Human Resources). During my career, I worked almost all aspects of Human Resources; recruiting, onboarding, position classifications, retraining, training, safety, pay, benefits, entitlements, employee relations, performance analysis, performance reports, employee redeployment, employee departures, manpower analysis, asset management, and strategic planning.
I left the military in 2012, attended school through 2013 and finally completed my BA in Human Resources Management in 2017. My job hunting after leaving the military has been difficult. I have been able to find work but I have taken the first jobs offered to avoid unemployment. I worked at Progressive Insurance as a Customer Service Representative. My job with Northrop Grumman was as an Administrative Assistant, and my current job with Jacobs Technology is administrative. I am a Product Coordinator, I ensure documents are completed, coordinated, and delivered to the customer within their given scheduled timeline. This entails scheduling, planning, timeline management, coordinating schedule changes with the author, leadership.
I have been tweaking my HR resume and I need feedback.

Thanks

30 November 2018 8 replies Resumes & Cover Letters

Answers

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Robin Schlinger Atlanta, GA

If you have not gotten the help you need, I may be able to help. I am a resume writer and career coach who has helped hundreds of folks with a military background transition. I agree with the advice for looking at What Color is My Parachute? (I took a 5-day workshop with Dick Bolles when he was still alive). I would be happy to look at your resume if you can send me a copy of your resume to robin@robinresumes.com or 404-875-2688.

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Jim Schreier Milwaukee, WI

I will add my willingness to review your resume. I've also posted some articles related to this on the site. I take a very strong stance on what key content should be included and what shouldn't.

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Joseph McGovern Colorado Springs, CO

Thank you all for your offers to assist me. My resume emails are on their way and I appreciate the feedback.

Joe

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Joseph McGovern Colorado Springs, CO

Thank you all for your offers to assist me. My resume emails are on their way and I appreciate the feedback.

Joe

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Steven Mathews Spring, TX

I have helped over a hundred people over the past 5+ years obtain jobs within 2-4 weeks when jobs were more scarce than hen's teeth. Without even looking at your resume, I know what is missing. I can help you. slmathews99@gmail.com. BTW, we have lived in Houston the past 10 years. We do not regret the move!

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Henry ("Dr. Hank") Stevens Fort Lauderdale, FL

Greetings Joe - glad to provide this small piece of advice. I do vocational counseling. My first assignment to my clients is to get and read the book, What Color Is Your Parachute by Bolles. There, you will find the BEST advice about job searching, interviewing skills and, yes, resume writing. Feel free to discuss off this channel at hlstevens42@gmail.com if you wish.

Dr Hank

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Gail Baccetti Lake Geneva, WI

Joseph, I'd also be happy to provide feedback on your resume. You may send it to me at gbaccetti@hotmail.com.

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Victoria Okotie Houston, TX

Hello Joseph,

Thank you for your service. I can certainly assist you with your resume. Please send to me on my work email: Victoria.okotie@bp.com. We can connect when you are relocate to Houston and I can share with you some resources that could help with you job hunting.

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